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21/6/17

At Joeche's. Birthday

Yahoo! On a lovely Saturday afternoon my family and I went to Joeche's birthday. His birthday was at Andy’s house. It was exciting at Joeche's because there was a bouncy castle. First I went on the bouncy castle and bounced higher and higher. It was fun bouncing on the bouncy castle. Next me VJ and Andy and Te Kapua played longball. Me and Te kapua were on batting. It was equal teams that means the teams have the same amount of players. Andy was cheating so then I said to Andy, “Stop cheating. I'm not playing. You are a cheater.” After that the pinata came out. It was fun smashing the pinata open. There was lots of lollies in the pinata. I thought it was fun. Later on I went back on the bouncy castle and played with the ball on the bouncy castle. I threw the ball so high that when I tried to catch I had to jump and then I fell on my stomach. It was sore. Finally we finished playing on the bouncy castle and the time was 12.09. We had fireworks at night time. It was splendid doing the fireworks. After that I said to my mum, “Can we go home please mum?” She said, “Yes.” I said, “Thank you mum.’’ Then my family and I went home.